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March 2016

Here, I want to Thank you…

There were some people who were destined to be my “sudden companion” or “an angel” while I was traveling from Surabaya to Japan alone. Solo traveling was not as easy as I thought, yet it was still interesting and fun to be experienced. Actually, it was accidentally happened because of technical problem with the airplane; thus I can’t catch my connecting flight to Japan. Fiuh, this was my first time getting trouble with the airplane experiences. All I knew was I would be safely checking my passport and waiting in the boarding lounge and flying to Japan peacefully. But then, everything suddenly changed. That time, I wanted to cry, I was confused, I was afraid, and I didn’t know what I was going to do. I did. And I needed to calm down and keep being rational.

So, the story continued as I forced Mr. Todo (an officer from the Air Asia) to change my flight to Japan. I didn’t care, it was their responsibility to do that; the most important thing was I had to be in Japan in 14 March. And I really thanked him for his hard work and effort for I went to Japan safely. Without you Sir, I postponed my dream again. Thaaank you very much. I was sorry at the beginning; but I appreciated your work and your company’s commitment to their customers.

My next flight was at 9 p.m. Having a night flight was also nice too; I could see many stars and the moon clearer than I had seen from the earth. The view was very fascinating! Praise to Allah who created them. Looking at the stars reminded me of someone who had the same name, but in another language. He helped me a lot to finish my essay, to have many midnight think tank, to accompany me doing my research, to spend time watching film and laughing together, to share stories and food, and to be my everything. Thank you.

I arrived in Kuala Lumpur International Airport at midnight. It was so huge, it had 4 floors; but wonderful. Here, as I laid all my luggage but couldn’t sleep, a young Malaysian general practitioner (I forgot his name) helped me to find money changer, gave me a bread because I was starving but can’t buy any food because I didn’t have any Ringgit Malaysia, and oversaw my luggage while I was strolling around KLIA. You were the best, bro. I was supposed to buy you some KFC food. Next time, when I meet you, in any occasion, I owe you something.

Then, I got a window seat beside a British couple. They were lovely. Sorry, I forgot their names. They told me that they would have their second honeymoon in Osaka. Before this trip, they had traveled to Australia to visit their relatives, and then went to Japan, enjoying time together. They made me totally envy. You knew, along the 6-hour flight, all they did was complimenting each other or holding hands or smiling without talking but having the eye-to-eye sight as in romantic drama. Unluckily, I didn’t see they kissed; or maybe they did when I was sleeping (who knew that). I wish I had a spouse like them; loving and caring each other. Uwuwuwuw. Baper flight then.

We arrived in Japan safely, Alhamdulillah, at 3 p.m. Japan time. The couple said farewell but I wish I met them again. May Allah always bless you, Ma’am, Sir. The last, of course I would like to say thank you to my professor; Mr. Ogawa Hideki to pick me up and change his schedule all the way from Tokyo to Kansai to Okayama by shinkansen. It was  pleasure to have you as my sensei in Japan. Really, you had me like I was your daughter.

Ya, solo traveling grows your awareness and strengthen your mentality. It makes you being stronger to face the challenge, to manage yourself, and to realize that you cannot stand without Allah. Beside, you will learn that  never feeling so lonely, because remember, Allah will always be by your side. He helps you right after you need help; He helps you in the right time.

 

Nippon ni, Yokoso!

Nihon ni, YOKOSO!

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Di Okayama Castle

Alhamdulillah, dapet rejeki dari Allah buat ngunjungi Jepun tahun ini. Aaa… this is the best birthday present for me… It happens in my 21st! Banyak yang tanya, ini program apa, caranya gimana, dan lain-lain; jadi aku jawab di sini.

So, sebenarnya program apa yang aku ikuti?
A: Nama programnya adalah Study and Visit Japan 2016: Japan’s Post-War and Modernisation Era. Berlatar belakang dari ide Profesor Ogawa dari Okayama University untuk memperkenalkan Jepang lebih jauh ke masyarakat ASEAN, sang profesor pun memutuskan mengajukan proposal ke JASSO dan ASEAN University Network. Setelah disetujui oleh JASSO dan AUN, mereka mengadakan seleksi khusus dengan mengirimkan undangan ke seluruh universitas di 9 negara yang sudah menjalin kerjasama dengan AUN. Di Indonesia, ada 4 universitas yang diundang: Unair, UGM, UI, dan ITB. Para universitas ini harus mengirimkan 3 delegasi terbaiknya untuk diikutkan seleksi tingkat ASEAN. Kemudian pihak AUN dan Okayama University akan memilih mahasiswa dengan kualifikasi khusus untuk diundang belajar singkat di Jepang.

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Bersama Prof. Ogawa Hideki

Di mana aku menemukan program semacam ini?
A: Aku mengecek secara rutin kiriman dari akun resmi Line IOP Unair. Nah, begitu tahu ada program ini dan setelah membaca lengkap deskripsinya, akupun langsung mendaftarkan dan mempersiapkan diri. Membaca informasi dengan teliti dan detail sejak awal itu sangat penting; karena dengan begitu kita akan bisa mengukur kemampuan diri, mengatur jadwal, dan menentukan rencana ke depan. Juga, jangan malas-malas membuka situs yang menyediakan informasi beasiswa dan program pertukaran pelajar atau studi di luar negeri. Kamu perlu aktif untuk mencari.

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Indonesia itu….

Syarat untuk bisa berpartisipasi di program ini ada apa saja?
A: Paspor, TOEFL ITP/iBT yang layak (di atas 500), tes kesehatan lengkap, surat pernyataan orang tua, transkrip berbahasa inggris, IPK di atas 3, CV, esai akademik, dan surat rekomendasi. Pastikan semuanya sudah tersiapkan jauh-jauh hari, terutama tes kesehatan yang perlu dilakukan di Lab yang ternyata membutuhkan waktu seminggu-dua minggu. Semua dokumen aplikasi tersebut dikirim via online kok, bahkan pengumumannya juga via online. Jadi tak perlu bingung mengirim lewat pos lagi. Plus, siapkan finansial untuk berjaga-jaga ketika terpilih dan berangkat.

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Di depan Kantor Pemerintahan Hiroshima yang hancur karena bom atom

Bagaimana beasiswa yang ditawarkan?
A: Dari JASSO sendiri, setiap mahasiswa diberi beasiswa sebanyak 80.000 yen yang digunakan untuk akomodasi dan biaya program. Okayama University juga membebaskan mahasiswa untuk round trip ticket selama di Jepang; tapi jujur aku kurang tahu berapa biaya yang sudah dikeluarkan oleh Okayama University. Jadi, peserta hanya diminta untuk membayar tiket pesawat mereka sendiri. Untuk kasusku, aku mengajukan dana ke Unair dan akhirnya dibiayailah tiket pesawatku. I was fully covered then. Cuma kalau pengeluaran pribadi (seperti beli perlengkapan musim dingin, jajan, dll) aku tetap harus membeli sendiri; meskipun besarannya tidak melebihi kemampuan finansial keluarga.

Program ini berlangsung berapa hari?
A: Hanya selama 8 hari sebenarnya; tetapi jika dihitung dari kedatangan hingga kepulangan, membutuhkan waktu total 9 hari. Tanggal 13, para peserta sudah berkumpul di Jepang. Tanggal 21, kami bersiap pulang ke negara masing-masing.

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Sakura!

Berapa orang yang diundang dari seluruh ASEAN?
A: Total semuanya ada 33 mahasiswa dari 8 negara. Hanya Brunei Darussalam dan Myanmar yang tidak berpartisipasi di program ini. Indonesia sendiri diwakili oleh 3 orang; 2 dari UGM, 1 dari Unair.

Apa yang dilakukan selama di sana?
A: Program ini terdiri atas 3 sesi utama; lecture series, trip, dan presentation. Dua hari pertama adalah sesi perkuliahan tentang pengenalan Jepang, sejarah Jepang zaman Edo dan Meiji, sejarah politik Jepang ketika Perang Dunia 1 dan 2, dan modernisasi di Jepang. Tiga hari berikutnya adalah nge-trip ke 9 kota di Jepang bagian selatan. Kami keliling dari Kyoto, Okayama, Kure, Miyajima Island, Ohtsushima Island, Shimonoseki, Hagi, Hiroshima, dan Kurashiki. Kami mengunjungi berbagai museum, kuil Shinto, terowongan bawah air, dan banyak situs sejarah Jepang yang sulit ditemui di buku teks. Seharian berikutnya, kami dibagi menjadi beberapa kelompok untuk melakukan presentasi tentang “Apa yang paling menarik untukmu di Jepang?” Pertanyaan ini sangat sederhana; tetapi untuk menjawabnya dibutuhkan penjelasan panjang lebar yang cukup merepresentasikan Jepang dari sudut pandang kami. Selain itu, ketika sesi perkenalan negara, kami diminta untuk menjelaskan sedikit sejarah dan konstitusi masing-masing.

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Human Torpedo: Kaiten Museum, Ohtsushima Island

Apakah program ini akan berlanjut setiap tahun?
A: Prof. Ogawa akan pindah ke Chiba University; tetapi sepertinya Okayama University akan melanjutkan program ini dengan format yang kurang lebih sama. Atau bisa juga Prof. Ogawa mengusulkan Chiba University untuk mengadakan program serupa tahun depan.

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Sekolahnya Para Pemimpin Jepang di zaman Restorasi Meiji di Hagi

Apa saja persiapannya sebelum berangkat ke Jepang?
A: Yang jelas visa harus sudah beres sebelum berangkat. Kalau menggunakan e-paspor, kita bisa mengajukan aplikasi visa waiver asalkan kunjungan tidak lebih dari 15 hari. Kalau menggunakan paspor biasa, memang agak ribet, tetapi dengan adanya surat penjaminan dari universitas di Jepang, malah sangat mudah. Selain itu, siapkan pula pakaian yang cocok untuk digunakan di sana; pantau cuacanya, berapa suhunya, sesuaikan dengan kebutuhan kita. Jepang sebagai negara empat musim memang indah saat musim semi; tapi suhunya kadang masih tidak bersahabat bagi masyarakat yang tinggal di daerah tropis. Ada beberapa temanku yang alergi dingin gara-gara dia tidak membawa baju penahan dingin; dan akhirnya malah beli di Jepang saat situasinya sudah cukup memburuk. Belajar tentang Indonesia, hubungan antara Indonesia dan Jepang, hubungan antara Jepang dan ASEAN menjadi bekal yang sangat penting untuk menjamin kekondusifan situasi belajar di sana; karena sekali lagi, tujuan trip kali ini adalah juga untuk belajar. Senang-senang tentu saja, tetapi esensi dan pelajaran dari perjalanan itulah yang justru sangat penting untuk pengembangan diri ke depannya.

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Yuk, Presentasi Bentar
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Safe flight, everyone.
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Ms. Pasita (all photos are credited to her), Ryoko-san, Shoko-san
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We’re Young and We Have a Bright Future

 

How to Write an Impressive Thesis

*Although it’s for Ph.D students, just take a look to enrich our writing skills. Reblogged form here*  Enjoy!

In English the core building blocks of any intellectual or research argument are paragraphs. Each paragraphs should be a single unit of thought, a discrete package of ideas composed of closely linked sentences. The most generally applicable sequence to follow is — Topic, Body, Tokens, Wrap.

  • The opening ‘topic’ sentence alerts readers to a change of subject and focus, and cues readers (in ‘signpost’ mode) about what the paragraph covers. It should never link backwards to material that came before (linkages are instead always made forward in ‘wrap’ sentences). So be wary of starting paragraphs with linking words (such as ‘However’, ‘Never the less’, ‘Furthermore’), lest they lead you into looking back. Instead topic sentences should clearly signal a new focus of attention. Yet they also need to be carefully written, to give readers the impression of a fluent, ‘natural’ progression of thought. Remember too that a signpost is just that — it is a very short cuing or naming prompt, not a mini-tour guide or a preview of the whole paragraph argument to come.
  • The main ‘body’ sentences give the core argument of the paragraph. In research work they need to clearly and carefully set out reasoning, describe results, develop implications, elucidate formulae, or elaborate and explain theoretical and thematic points. Body sentences constitute the mainstream of the paragraph, the core of the unit of thought.
  • Researchers normally must offer tokens to back up and support their core arguments. ‘Token’ sentences can be sprinkled across a paragraph amongst the body sentences, at apt points where they are most needed or useful. Typically token sentences are examples, references, quotations from other authors, supporting facts, or analysis of accompanying ‘attention points’, exhibits, tables, charts or diagrams. In some degree ‘token’ sentences are inherently digressive: they potentially lead away from the mainstream of the paragraph. Hence they need careful management, especially when two or more token sentences follow each other, without intervening ‘body’ sentences.
  • Finally the ‘wrap’ sentence serves to pull the paragraph argument together, to make clear to readers that a building block has been put in place. It should be constructive and substantive, adding value to the argument, not simply repeating early materials. It should also handle any link forward to the next paragraph that is needed.

Rational, skimming readers do not treat all parts of paragraphs in the same way. In search of the quickest possible appreciation of what is being said, they pay special attention to the beginning and ends of paragraphs, to the topic and wrap sentences — a technique commonly taught on ‘speed reading’ courses. When and if they look more closely inside the body of the paragraph, readers may also initially skip across token sentences. And they will normally put off digging into ‘hard’ formulae or tough exposition materials in search of a more intuitive (if approximate) understanding gleaned from the sentences that precede or follow them.

It follows that the beginning and endings of paragraphs should always be the most carefully written materials. Try to separate out these two sentences and look at them together. Check how they read, how substantive and informative they are, and how they might be improved.

Six common paragraph problems

Six things most commonly go wrong in writing paragraphs:

1 The author starts with a backward link to the previous paragraph, instead of a fresh topic sentence. Readers may conclude that this is simply ‘more of the same’ and so skip onwards to the next paragraph. Even those who persist may become confused — what is the paragraph really about? Is it the start sentence? Or the different point given in the now ‘submerged’ topic sentence that comes second?

2 The paragraph begins with a ‘throat-clearing’ sentence, or some formalism or other form of insubstantial sentence (or perhaps several such sentences). For instance authors might begin by discussing a caveat, a definition, a difficulty or a methods issue that form part of the provenance of the argument to be made. The effect is again to bury the real topic sentence one or two sentences deep in the paragraph. Readers may conclude on a quick look that the whole paragraph is just an insubstantial caveat, or navel-gazing of the familiar academic kind, and so skip forward, missing the change of focus completely. If they do persevere reading they may not correctly identify the now submerged topic sentence, and then find that the wrap sentence seems unjustified or tendentious, because it does not fit with the apparent topic.

3 The author starts the whole paragraph with another author’s name and reference, for instance: ‘Harding (2007: 593) argues …’ This is a beginning especially beloved of some PhDers and other unconfident authors, creeping forward with their argument propped up on the supports of other peoples’ work. Some postgrad students will construct whole sets of paragraphs in this manner, running over several pages, every one of which starts with another author’s name, especially in ‘literature review’ sections. They mistakenly believe that this way of proceeding will convince readers that they have closely read the literature. But when the first words of a paragraph are someone else’s name, the author is inadvertently signalling: ‘Here follows a completely derivative paragraph’ — or section if this pattern is repeated. So critical readers’ common reaction is to downgrade or skip the paragraph (or sequence of such paragraphs) and move on.

The easy solution to this problem begins by not thinking in terms of individual authors, but focusing instead on the schools of thought, or ‘sides’ in an empirical controversy, that the authors to be cited represent. Write a clear and free-standing topic sentence. Then explain the core ideas or propositions of one or more schools of thought involved in the body sentences. Relegate author names to the supporting references that come at the ends of sentences, where they belong.

4 A paragraph stops abruptly, usually because the author has become aware that it has got too too long. Commonly this occurs because token sentences have multiplied — perhaps because the planned brief exposition of an example or analysis of an exhibit have become unwieldy. Usually authors here make an enforced ‘emergency stop’, and then commonly write up what should have been the wrap sentence as the beginning of the next paragraph. The first paragraph then has a sequence of Topic, Body, Tokens but no wrap sentence. And the next paragraph 2 starts with the displaced wrap1 sentence, and has a buried topic2 sentence. Readers will get a bit lost at the end of paragraph 1 here, as a token or body sentence ends the paragraph with no form of recap. And they will read the displaced wrap sentence as signalling the topic of paragraph 2 (which it doesn’t). They may puzzle through paragraph 2, feeling that it was not what was promised at the start, or that it does too many things. Or again they may skip forward here, feeling that paragraph 2 only repeats.

5 Paragraphs get too long, extending beyond the acceptable research text range of 100-200 words to take up 300 words or more. Often this happens because tokens have multiplied or swollen outside the limits that can be handled easily. But because of their partly digressive character the author is reluctant to recognize the need to create separate paragraphs to handle them. Especially when they discuss attention points or exhibits that are complex and not designed to be self-contained and easily understood, body and token sentences may blur together, creating text where the mainstream argument becomes hard to distinguish.

The solution to very long paragraphs has to be brutal. Once a paragraph passes 250 words, it must be partitioned, usually as equally as feasible, and separate topic and wrap sentences provided for each part. If the problem arises from an overlong exposition of a token or an exhibit, then the author needs to find a solution that allows a partial digression to be smoothly handled. If a paragraph falls between 200 and 250 words this might be retainable, so long as the wrap sentence can still reconnect readers back to the (now rather distant) topic sentence.

6. A paragraph is too short. For a research text this occurs if it falls below 100 words, and especially if it consists of just one sentence or is less than 50 words. Normally, short, bitty paragraphs like this look terrible on the printed page of a journal or a research book, and they undermine the usefulness of paragraphs as argument building blocks. Short paragraphs happen because an author is unsure what to say, or has not properly thought through how a point or a set of points fit together or can be sequenced into the overall argument. Some reflect miscellanies of points that the author has not acknowledged as such. Other single sentence paragraphs are ‘orphan’ sentences that should be incorporated into longer nearby paragraphs but have not been — for example, in starting lists or sequences of connected paragraphs. Orphan sentences (and short paragraphs generally) should always be merged into their neighbours, so that they disappear.

Two groups of people need to take particular care adapting to this convention of English paragraphing at research level. First, Spanish speakers (and related languages) often write using multiple, very short or single-sentence paragraphs, organized in subtle thematic ways that English-speaking readers find very hard to follow. Such an audience will often see only a baffling multiplicity of paragraphs that is interpreted as disorganized thinking. Second, journalists, and now some academic bloggers also, use short paragraphs that look OK in newsprint or on narrow or spaced-out blog columns. All these types of author should aggregate their short paragraphs into longer ones of at least 100 to 200 words if they want to publish journal articles or research books in English. If you have ever seen a journalist’s writing transposed into book form without this change, you will appreciate that there are also strong aesthetic reasons to make this shift.

To follow up these ideas in more detail see my book: Patrick Dunleavy, ‘Authoring a PhD’ (Palgrave, 2003) or the Kindle edition, where Chapter 5 covers ‘Writing clearly’ and Chapter 6 ‘Developing as a Writer’.

Three Hours as Forever

Yes, when we spend time together, as the two blessed people;

recognizing the destiny, gathering our future;

Yes, when we realize that each of us matters to the other;

counting every second to be memorized;

Yes, when we continue to walk side by side;

helping and giving hands to strengthen our journey;

Yes, it’s us;

standing here.

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